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  • Dr_Worm

    Looks like its between a bush and a tree, I'd make it one or the other.
    The lion/crown seems out of place.
    Nice loppers.

    Heres a deck I'm working on..
    Stuck the text at the bottom for better truck/illustration positioning.
  • PhillisWillis

    jumpy said:
    PhillisWillis said:So I went away and had a little play this is what I came up with....

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    First change those colours - yeek
    + i would look to simplify it a lot more, instead of using the whole male silhouette maybe just a male bust or the hat or a gloved hand holding a cane. What kind of clothing is it they do?

    Also look at the line work in some of the old engravings for shadowing inspiration eg.

    http://www.nanantiques.com/moda/moda1.htm

    I added a top hat to simplyfy the design. other than not being 100% satisfied with the shading i think its an improvment

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  • bugrock

    Dr_Worm said:Looks like its between a bush and a tree, I'd make it one or the other.
    The lion/crown seems out of place.
    Nice loppers.

    Heres a deck I'm working on..
    Stuck the text at the bottom for better truck/illustration positioning.


    where is the other rat's leg? maybe the text would look better bent along the curve of the edge of skateboard?

    Phillis:The pink thing does not follow the perspective of the rest of the hat. Also, lose the shadow underneath
  • PhillisWillis

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    Tweaked and changed. Although i'm not sure i'm happy with the final composition...
  • bugrock

    I meant the shape of the pink thing (I don't know the word for it, band maybe?), not it's color :) It should be curved like the edge of the top of the hat. Than maybe try making the hat bigger
  • Dr_Worm

    Looks like a segmented band right now. I like the hat idea better than the figure though.

    Heres my update. Any thoughts would be great.
  • jumpy

    PhillisWillis said:Image and video hosting by TinyPic

    Tweaked and changed. Although i'm not sure i'm happy with the final composition...

    do you need the est. date? its not a established brand so id drop it really.
    also id use only half the circle... something like this (but less of the arching, sorry real quick)
  • ENDOR

    Hey everybody,

    I could need some help with this design I'm working on. Do you think the "suicidal" logo on the cap is too much? I like it better with the logo on it but I'm not shure if it distracts attention from the rest of the design.

    Thanks in advance
    Seb

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  • jumpy

    i like it more without .
  • ENDOR

    Thanks for the feedback jumpy! I think you're right but I'm still not shure, haha. I'll give it a few more days to decide.
  • babix

    looks more balanced with logo, but i dont like the font
  • ENDOR

    Well, I can't chance the font since this is the actual Suicidal Tendencies logo :) But thanks for the feedback - this helps me anyway.
  • WXGFX

    I like it more without the logo too.
    Also the way 'Roadcrew' is curved looks a little odd to me..
  • PhillisWillis

    I have been working on suggestions and compositions from the last post and come up with something completely different from the original design. I am a lot happier about this piece now and have some other stuff I've been working on as well.

    jumpy said:
    PhillisWillis said:Image and video hosting by TinyPic

    Tweaked and changed. Although i'm not sure i'm happy with the final composition...

    do you need the est. date? its not a established brand so id drop it really.
    also id use only half the circle... something like this (but less of the arching, sorry real quick)


    Jumpy i looked at what you suggested and wasn't sure of the overall final appearance, but i do have a mock up of the design that way around, thank you for your input.

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  • WXGFX

    Its looking better man, the band around the base of the hat still doesn't match the curve of the top though!
  • WXGFX



    This design has come on leaps and bounds since my original sketch but its a big one for me so if anyone has any crits that would be super useful!
    Thanks
  • Dr_Worm

    WXGFX - What audience are you attempting to appeal to?
    - Reminds me of a scene from a kids tale
    - Sword looks small
    - Distracting face in the background / does it contribute to the main message?
    - Arrowhead tail? Little strange


    VS.
  • Charmer

    Hey guys, what do you think of this shirt design? It is for my own small company I'll be starting over and stands for keeping the child in yourself, beeing curious and play. I hope everyone can see right away that these are wooden swords, not quite sure of that right now.

    Not sure if I should change the composition a bit or better said if the swords are enough or if a bit of background would make it better... I deeply fell in love with lots and lots of detail work and try out simpler things this time. Thanks for your critiques anyway :)



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    WXGFX I like the composition, even though I think I'd shorten the dragons neck a bit, perspecively it looks a bit as if the neck would be very, very long, maybe you could try to foreshorten it a bit more. Can't wait to see the final. :)
  • OncleFetyd

    Hello, could you tell me what you think thank you
  • WXGFX

    Still working on this, I have drawn so many Dragons and Wyverns. You would not believe.
    This is what I have now.



    Crits would be nice!
  • jeremiah was a

    WXGFX said:Still working on this, I have drawn so many Dragons and Wyverns. You would not believe.
    This is what I have now.




    Crits would be nice!

    The composition is good, the dragon sits centrally, I think the dragon's body could almost be exaggerated and larger. The first rendition you did is probably my favourite though, I like that the dragon's shape leads your eye across the frame and it's wings pierce the border.

    I submitted this a couple days ago and it didn't make it past the approval section. It's not much of a t-shirt design but I'm looking for critiques on it as a print.


  • timofeie

    i don't really like the text but everything else is really amazing, jeremiah.
  • jeremiah was a

    timofeie said:i don't really like the text but everything else is really amazing, jeremiah.

    Yeah I'm not big on the text either, thanks for the feedback Tim.
  • timofeie

    Ian Curtis from Joy Division
  • Rob4prez

  • jumpy

    Rob4prez said:

    Sorry this is poorly executed. I would use some halftone effect on the pic and delete everything other than the mouth, eyes area. Then id take a photo of a real red drip/splat, throw some red paint on a wall and let it drip or play with a red spray can.

    The font is a bit meh.
    Heres my 10 min attempt.. font still meh but you get idea.
  • WXGFX


    Only a sketch and only linework, but I'm not sure on the impact... feels like it needs more, unsure..
  • jumpy

    WXGFX said:
    Only a sketch and only linework, but I'm not sure on the impact... feels like it needs more, unsure..

    the text is a bit much and I think you dont need the lower body, fade out just above crotch.. is it vintage tattoo style?
  • WXGFX



    I'm about to post this mocked onto a tee but also going to use it as a cover for my design portfolio.
    It matters quite a bit that it looks good so any last critiques before I declare it finished would be killer!
    Thanks
  • HarryDiaz

    WXGFX said:

    I'm about to post this mocked onto a tee but also going to use it as a cover for my design portfolio.
    It matters quite a bit that it looks good so any last critiques before I declare it finished would be killer!
    Thanks

    It's kind of difficult to read the "S" in slayer.
  • William Henry

    jeremiah was a said:I submitted this a couple days ago and it didn't make it past the approval section. It's not much of a t-shirt design but I'm looking for critiques on it as a print.



    Don't know how I missed this until now, but this is rad.

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